Tuesday, February 3, 2009

Andrew's Cabin

I remember, yes, I remember, the wasp nest in the lawn. I remember, oh-yes, I remember, the smell of hot tar. I remember, uh-huh, I remember, the way your eyelids swelled shut, from the stingers, burning in a forest fire heat. I remember the red rubber boots you wore. I remember falling off the side of your roof, landing on a pad of honeycomb, and unleashing the hordes of little stingers. The way you waddle-ran, in boots too big, to try and escape the tiny furies. I remember the sound of the vacuum cleaner, sucking in, with a woosh, the little bastards that clung to my polar fleece. I remember playing star-fox, munching on chips, then going in the yard with new plastic army gear. You threw your knife on the roof, and I mine. We both knew we wanted them back, but only I braved the roof. Too small to climb right, and you yelling warnings, we never had a chance. I remember the way they swarmed, wasn't it scary? I remember exacting our revenge hours later, trapping a wasp in the freezer, waiting until it died. I remember the first time I went to your cabin, Andrew Kline.

2 comments:

  1. Vivid. Lively. Evocative. Painful (I felt like I was being stung). My favorite line is "the way your eyelids swelled shut, from the stingers, burning in a forest fire heat". Yikesers.

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  2. It is a bit confusing... did you get stung after you landed on the honeycomb (dum dum), and then go back, throw your knives on the roof and get stung again? Hm. It seems unlikely that even you two would be that careless. You must start at the end, then tell the story leading up to it. Yes? I like that format, but it is a little unclear.

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